Weekend Writing Warrior – June 29, 2014

This week I’m sharing a few lines from my WIP, Full Court Press. Here’s a little blurb:

Danny McMillan is the hotshot new head football coach fresh from D2 purgatory. Kate Snyder is one of the winning-est coaches in D1 women’s basketball. She’s also a former Wolcott University Warrior and a local legend.

It’s a battle of the sexes, but this time the stakes are higher. She thinks he’s a misogynist, if a sexy one. He thinks she’s overly aggressive, but can’t help but be intrigued by her. Their chemistry threatens to explode, but they both know allowing their relationship to become public would be career suicide.

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“I think intentionally fouling a player to stop the clock should be outlawed.”

She blinked as she straightened to her full height and turned back to him, her body braced as if it might take every inch of her strength to absorb the sheer absurdity of his statement. “I’ve heard you have issues with clock management.”

“I don’t see the point in delaying the inevitable. I play straight, I play tough, and I play through to the end. No trick plays, just the fundamentals.” Her lips parted, and it was all he could do to resist their blatant invitation. “Make your fouls as flagrant as you want, Kate, but the outcome is going to be the same.”

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That’s it for this week. Be sure to check out the work of all my fellow Weekend Writing Warriors!

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15 Replies to “Weekend Writing Warrior – June 29, 2014”

  1. That was some powerful innuendo going on there. Great dialogue.
    (Nothing for me this week. Revamping my blog.)

  2. Oh my god, that final line. Pure gold. Maggie, I need this story so freaking badly. Finish it hard and fast and don’t delay the inevitable. 😉

  3. This passage sets up some good tension. I would take out the “I think” from the first line to make it stronger and include a beat from the original speaker so we get a feel for how serious he is with his statement.

    I love the inclusion of the woman’s body language. I’m not sure, however, what the blinking adds to the scene. I like the idea of her standing to her full height. That shows attention.

    When her lips parted, was she really giving him an invitation or was this just his perception? I think the idea of it is intriguing but may be stronger if the passage were totally in one person’s point of view. I feel like I got a mixed message. She’s frustrated in him, but he thinks she wants him sexually. Typical girl/guy situation, huh? None-the-less, there’s a lot to think about here, so I’d be interested in reading on.

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  4. I get the impression he thinks the woman should always let the man win (hmmm) and also that woman always want “it” and him. Sure hope he isn’t as narrow-minded as he appears. Great tension.

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